Graded hate mail for October 13.
So it’s going on 5 months since the last installment. What’s the deal? I get the feeling that you’re becoming as bored with this story as I have been over the last several chapters. Why not just tell us who the wife is and put this thing out of it’s misery.
The magic has evaporated buddy.
Congratulations on using capital letters and complete sentences. Congratulations on excellent spelling and diction. You even demonstrate a grasp of contractions, including the ever-challenging “you’re.” That’s the good news. Now for the bad…
1) “It’s” is a contraction meaning “it is,” but you confused it with “its,” a possessive adjective. You should have written “…out of its misery.”
2) Use a comma to set off direct address, as in “The magic has evaporated, buddy.”
I give you a B+. A solid effort, but I’m sure you can do better.